I'd love some feedback on this one. It's a Christmas worship song I wrote last year. I gave it a hymn-like structure. I've thought about recording it for release this upcoming Christmas. Let me know your thoughts:
https://songpressmusic.com/kylecruse88/audio/367/hymn-for-this-child
Hi Dave,
Thanks for taking the time to listen and critique my new song. And I'm definitely not offended by any of your rewrites. I asked for honest feedback so thank you for being willing to give it! I did choose a lot of these lyrics intentionally, though I am still going to tweak a few of them now that I'm looking back over them. I do like your lyric "In all the things you do" in verse 1 better than what I had written. Would you be okay if I used that? I'll give you credit on it if you want since I didn't come up with it myself. Thanks again!
Kyle
I'd love some feedback on this song I just wrote today. I think it's one of the best I've written in awhile, but I'd like some second opinions so I don't get carried away sharing it too early. It's a song written to the people we would label as "Karens." It's a reminder to us all that there is a real human soul behind every person we label as such, a soul that is deeply loved by God. I hope and pray it is a respectful and meaningful approach to this topic.
https://songpressmusic.com/kylecruse88/audio/297/jesus-loves-you-karen
Some call you entitled
Demanding this whole world
Exists to meet your standards
A Karen's what you're termed
Some call you controlling
Unwilling to see through
But I've spoken to my Manager
And this message is for you
Jesus loves you just as you are
Beneath all pride and selfish arrogance
He sees Your heart
Jesus loves you just as you've been
Deep inside the darkest door of your soul
Jesus loves you, Karen
Some call you demeaning
Complain to reach your goal
Forgetting that behind each human heart
There is a soul
But God calls you beloved
His child just the same
So come speak to my Manager
And let Him change your name
Wherever you have been, whatever you have done
You can't stop His love for you, Karen
Whatever walls you build, whatever fights you've won
You can't stop the Savior from caring
